T1 writing

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We are learning to: write a description

We can do this when we can: include interesting words, write sentences that make sense,  use describing words  and edit our work.

The thing is dirty it has some ? And he has no eyes it has holes and it's eye balls fell out. It has no hair and it's creepy and spooky it lost its tooth the thing looks like a ghost. The thing is yucky and bony.

Teacher comment: You have used some interesting words in your description.
Your next step is to edit your writing and check it makes sense.


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